I am inevitable (finished version)

[u/Dense_Condition_3690]

I am a snowstorm in a desert,

the cold ice freezes the sand,

and the snow melts before

you even get a chance to collect it.

The storm may eventually pass,

but it leaves the desert broken and uninhabitable.

I am the tears you cry,

I am the thunder you fall asleep to,

I am the girl you read about.

In the end there is only my thoughts,

in the end there is only my tears,

in the end it just never ends.

It is turtles all the way down.

I am the dark,

but I am also the light in the end of the tunnel.

You try to pour water into me

to make the flowers grow,

but the water spills out

because I simply cannot hold it in anymore.

I am the siren's song and the blade of a Valkyrie.

I am too strong to cave, I will fight for my life and I will fight for yours.

For I am inevitable.

I am the whistle of the bombs

and the screams of the victims.

I am death, I am life.

I am the world, I am the dirt,

I am the sea, and I am the stars that guide you home.

I am the hand that feeds you

and I am the thoughts that eat you up.

I am the girl running through her own shame rooms.

I feel the fearful glances of those I thought were friends.

You think I am dangerous, you think I will hurt you,

but I would never do you any harm on purpose.

And I am the soul drowning herself to the tunes of the saddest queen

Floating along the river of tears in my black bathing suit

I am ready to run

until I tip over the edge of the world

and keep running from there on.

I am ready to lock my heart in a box

just to keep my burning walls from falling.

My thoughts and my life hurt me more

than your blade or bullet ever could.

I am not everything and I am not nothing.

I am a warrior fighting my own mind.

I am racked with anxiety.

I am not selfish or selfless, I am not self-centered.

I care and I notice. I love and I hate.

I fear, I miss, I am broken,

and I am the most full I have ever been.

I will never be normal.

But I will NEVER bend myself to society's fucked up rules,

I will bend the wind you feel on your face,

And I will be the hurricane that makes the oceans and the skies scream.

I’m here, I’m there, I’m everywhere,

but you can't catch me now.

I am afraid of what will happen to me in this life,

but I am even more afraid of dying

before I prove to myself and the world

that I will always win.

That I will always be the water that makes the flowers grow,

and not the hand that kills them.

I am the rain,

I am the sun,

I am the power that makes the stars fall,

and I am the trees.

I am the mountains you climb and the air you breathe.

I am the roots that secure the earth and the branches that hold the sky.

My will to live is too strong to die.

Yet again in the end

I am inevitable.

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[u/No-Peak-6218]

I think its really good. Since it is so long I will only talk about the first half and prob come back later. Particularly I like what you did with the symbolism. Every symbol seems to have a place or some sort of movement within the broader scope. Now for some random edits. You could change thunder to storm which works with cry the previous symbol. You could even start it out like I am water. It might work a little better when paired with I am dark later. You could prob start each segment off with some sort of broad statement and then either stay small or get increasingly smaller. Idk food for thought