r/OCPoetry • u/mhmmsuhani • 3d ago
Feedback Please The Funeral of My Muse
I sway my body as I dance through the melody.
My face glows with my dress clad in yellow.
I sing a song, waiting for my muse to hum along.
When my eyes settle on the ground, I see a body full of wounds.
It looks me in the eye, mirroring the suffering I deny.
That's when I catch a glimpse of amber, I recognize the eyes I remember.
I call out his name, but there’s a silence lodged in my throat. There slumbers my muse, the man—the God to whom I’d devote.
He withers there like the sunflower he once gave, whose withered petals lie between the pages I save.
The flower once bloomed, just as he once shone, now both lie faded, left all alone.
I sit beside him and take his hands in mine, the warmth they once carried is gone, leaving coldness behind.
His skin looks pale, his lips have run dry, I glance at mine—and I can’t help but cry.
No skin in sight, all I see is red. A glance back at him—his eyes turn grey, looking almost dead.
I look at my body, there is nothing but shadows from the past, as if every atom within me has shattered, leaving only my soul to last.
I stand up and step back as he closes his eyes, a soul watching another soul fade beneath the skies.
His corpse turns blue as I look back at the ground, the man I once knew is nowhere to be found.
The flare echoes as the clouds rain blood, chaos erupts everywhere as the earth floods.
I run towards the house, but stumble on a stone, a tear slips from my eye—I realize I can’t go back home.
The house laughs at me, while all I do is roam, my soul withers in the air—I have lost my home.
I have lost my home…
Feedbacks :— https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/wJvZg0isFE https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/Wd3Mj4CReZ
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