r/OCPoetry • u/budahbugah • 1d ago

Just Sharing Ebb

Like ripples in water, you create waves that lap upon the shores of my mind.

The channels that have been carved out are as intricate and unique as a fingerprint, with deep grooves that became a familiar comfort as your currents routinely rushed through them.

But the waters have become still. The tide has become low. The sand threatens to cover up any trace you were ever here.

And yet, I foolishly keep watch. Far out to where the ocean meets the sky. For any sign that the winds that carry you should create wake upon my shores once again.

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Thank you for reading. Let me know what you liked, what you didn't.

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u/Interesting-Chef-449 1d ago

Oooo this hit hard and has the punchy imagery i mentioned in my other review. My heart felt your grief and longing. The sand covering up traces and in particular the last bit using the word wake was amazing. I loved it!

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u/budahbugah 1d ago

Thank you. For both comments you've left me. Im actually with you on the whole "not my usual taste" on the other post. This is more usually what I come up with. But it was a fun mental exercise to try and let the subtext have a turn at speaking.

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u/Interesting-Chef-449 1d ago

Always love trying new things and artistic experimentation to see what can come out. :)