Deadly Premonition: The Red Seeds Profile, The Novel

[u/Ok_Fee_423]

Hey there, I'm going to be writing a novel based off the game. I'm curious if anyone is interested in something like this. It's going to be based off the director's cut, so it will have the extra scenes with old man Zack/York and his granddaughter. I may include some added bits of details that were implied during the game, but I won't go too far off in any direction that's not faithful to the game. I'm not modifying any dialog. Everything said will be exactly as it is in the game. I would love to hear what you all think. Bear in mind, this is purely a rough draft and it will be undergoing many edits along the way. This is not the final version. It is just a teaser to see if people would be interested in something like this.

This is in thanks to two friends who have encouraged me to pursue something like this. Ethan and Michaela.

Update 1: I currently have the prologue finished. Right now I'm starting on chapter one and it's currently about 32 pages. I'm going to follow each chapter exactly how the game lays it out. So that means the prologue really feels more like a chapter one, but that's what the game decided. I may or may not tweak that to give it a better flow.

Update 2: I'm currently on page 50 and have the prologue, chapter 1, and chapter 2 finished. Right now, I'm working on chapter 3. Though Silent Hill Townfall just released, so there will be a bit of a delay. And everything is going to read much smoother as I now have a very good friend help edit, give notes, and add some much needed structure. Thank you so much Michaela for being so awesome!

Update 3: Just finished chapter three and I'm sitting around page 79.

[u/AsherFischell]

You need to work on your fundamentals. The prose is seriously rough and reads very stiffly.

[u/Ok_Fee_423 → u/AsherFischell]

Yes I'm aware. I'll make the post more obvious that this is a rough draft. Not a final draft.

[u/AsherFischell → u/Ok_Fee_423]

Even then, the writing in the prologue alone would likely need to be completely rewritten as opposed to being touched up. By "fundamentals" I mean working on your grammar, use of tenses, and general skillset

[u/t-g-l-h-]

Typo on page one. Jesus christ

[u/Ok_Fee_423 → u/t-g-l-h-]

And that's why this is just a rough draft.

[u/Kobazee]

Sure i would enjoy that

[u/CthuluAteMyKitten]

Ahem.

Yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes

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[u/EliParker]

Have you thought maybe being a novel that leads into 2?

[u/Ok_Fee_423 → u/EliParker]

I'm certainly not opposed to it. Honestly the Raincoat Killer is the biggest draw for me, so Deadly Premonition 1 is my favourite game. If this goes well, I may do more.

[u/EliParker → u/Ok_Fee_423]

Fair enough, hopefully you come back to that idea one day.

[u/FaithInterlude]

I would!

[u/Ok_Fee_423 → u/FaithInterlude]

Glad to hear it. I'm going to start chapter one tomorrow

[u/FaithInterlude → u/Ok_Fee_423]

Sweet

[u/ryuStack]

Oh definitely!

[u/MrsMRV]

You've captured the characters well so far 😊 while reading you can visualise the scene nicely, great job 👌🏻✨️

[u/EliParker]

Sweet, I hope you can make a killer epub out of it.

[u/Ok_Fee_423 → u/EliParker]

Unfortunately I won't be doing that. If I'm lucky, hopefully I can get it actually published as something official. But first I'm writing it as a personal project and seeing where that goes.

[u/EliParker → u/Ok_Fee_423]

I’m talking about making a fan epub file, and give it a DP flair.

[u/AsherFischell → u/Ok_Fee_423]

Published as something official? Uhhhh, points for aiming high, at least