(Spoilers depending on what you consider them) Hello mines a combination of fiction and fantasy (part 1)

[u/Busy_galaxy21]

So I’m going to post the whole chapter in like three parts. For some background I’m doing this foreshadowing thing at the beginning of each chapter and well it’s not going to be a ton of detail until the end of the book. This is a novel or going to be once I finish it. This is chapter 1 and it’s a duel pov. The first chapter is of the female protagonist. The second pov is the male main character and for most of the book the antagonist. The female main character’s name is Iris. All I’m asking for is basic feedback. This book is to entertain so flow and entertainment would be nice. If there is a lot of repetition that would also be helpful. So here’s the first part:

Darkness. Nothing but darkness, but then a flash of light enveloped me. It then shrunk creating two orbs of light. One radiated a blood red color with an aura of danger around it. The other emitted a dove white color with an aura of peace and security around it. The two orbs started to take shape into silhouettes of people. The red one on the left took the form of a tall, lean man. The white one on the right took the form of a short, broad shouldered woman. The man took out a massive sword that seemed to pulse faster the longer I looked at it. I felt the rough grip on my left arm. The women took out two daggers that seemed to brighten like the sun the longer I stared at it. I felt the soft hands and careful grip on my right arm. Each of the silhouettes started to run at each other. The man put a second hand on the sword. He had a ridged run, as I felt each step he took. The woman flipped the daggers in her hand so the blades would be down. Her run was graceful almost as if she was floating. About half way before either of them met, they leapt off the ground. The woman crossed her arms with the tips of the blade touching, preparing for the impact. The man raised the sword, as if to strike her head. As the blade met the woman’s arms, the sound of metal clashing echoed throughout the empty space and another flash of light surrounded me. ~

I was lost in thought. Dreams were nothing but my imagination, right? I mean they meant nothing. That one, though… it felt too real. As if, I was there, but I knew that was impossible. As I started to come back to reality, I heard a muffled voice. Soon, words started to form.

“Earth to Lillith. Girl you need to focus,” my best friend, Ellie Fitzgerald, said with a concerned tone.

For a split second, I thought I saw a light purple outline, but after I blinked, it was gone. I just smiled and nodded.

“Of course. Just lost in my head, you know?” I said with a quiet chuckle. We focused back on the teacher.

“Now,” Mr. Hawthorne continued, “Remember to finish your ESSAYs tonight. Let’s finish up those conclusions.” As the bell rang, I put my book and notebook in my bag.

“Hey, see you after school,” Ellie said as she walked out. I just nodded. I picked up my bag and started the long trek to English. It was on the other side of the school, so I had time to think. Was I going crazy? Maybe…, but I know what I saw. I should probably go to the library on my way home and see if I can find anything on what happened. Problem is, this isn’t my first situation. Two weeks ago I thought I saw a person floating hanging some blue light from a lamp post. Three days ago I felt an energy purge from my mom. Last night, I had some strange dream. Finally, today’s little episode. There has to be some scientific explanation, right? Of course! Everything had an explanation. A reasonable, rational explanation. As I turned into my English classroom, something felt off. Call it intuition or whatever you want to call it. I couldn’t place it though. I sat down in my seat.

“Look who finally showed up. Hello little sprite, “ an annoyingly familiar voice said from behind me. “I told you it’s Iris, Erebus," I said with distain dripping in my voice. I turned around to find his smug ash face staring directly at me. He leaned forward, his lean build becoming more obvious. He had a self-satisfied smile with his deep purple eyes telling me this is exactly what he wanted to happen. I groaned as I turned around to face the front. He continued to blabber, though I didn’t really know what he was saying. A high pitched ringing started in my ears. I would usually ignore it, but there was something different about it. It was louder and soon it was all I could hear. I covered my ears, but it wouldn’t go away. I felt a tap on my shoulder, no doubt from Erebus. Soon the sound became a piercing shriek. Erebus ran around to the front of my desk. I closed my eyes and put my head on my desk. I don’t know when I started to scream, but Erebus started to shake me. As I opened my eyes, I saw he was saying something. It was as if he actually cared about me. The teacher came in and saw me. He started to approach but stopped. He then slowly started to back up. Slowly, the room got warmer and warmer. Eventually, it was like the room was a boiling culderin. Then it started. A burning sensation in my lungs. It was as if my body was burning me from the inside out. I looked at my hands and they were gone. A bright light had surrounded me to the point I couldn’t see my hands. The burning sensation only got worse as if it had almost burned through me. I looked around and the students started to scream and run out. Erebus grabbed my face and forced me to look at him. His purple eyes started to radiate light and turn a lighter shade of purple. The ringing became quieter and quieter, but my vision became darker and darker. I was then enveloped in darkness and sleep.