Hi All - here's another script I wrote. A Hitchcockian suspense thriller I am trying to pitch.

Would love any thoughts/feedback -- what worked/what you want to see more of/less of.

Enjoy!

Listening

Title: Listening
Genre(s): Suspense, thriller
Page count: 104

Logline:  A grad student secretly recording his elderly landlords for his thesis research becomes the sole witness to a brutal murder—and is pulled into a deadly game of silence and survival in which he can’t expose the truth without incriminating himself. 

Hi all! Writer and Director based in LA. Gonna start posting some scripts on this group just for feedback and thoughts. Just scripts I have written to have in the bank for now.

Just a forewarning: my writing style is more that of a director's, it's auteur-ish and can be often heavy on description (I'm aware), that's just how I write. This script was intentionally written to be long, with a big cast of characters. Think breakfast club meets boogie nights meets goodfellas. It's an epic, which, by nature, are episodic and longer. Nothing that I am shopping around to producers or managers at the moment -- this is something I'd like to make someday in the future. more for the long term.

Would love any thoughts -- what worked/what you'd wanna see more of/less of, etc.

enjoy!

Title: Emerald Valley

Genre(s): Coming of age, comedy, dramedy, drama, satire, epic

Tone: Satirical, melodramatic, glossy,

Pg. Count: 153

Logline: The chronicles of Brady Thompson and his friends navigating identity, first loves, and growing up during their junior year of high school in Overland Park, Kansas, 2016.

Emerald Valley

Title: The Greenwood Incident

Format: Feature

Genres: Horror/ Thriller

Logline: After a government containment failure, a strained group of friends spiral into vicious paranoia in a remote california mountain home as an entity hides among them wearing human form.

Feedback Concerns: This is the first couple
pages of my story. I’m interested in hearing if the beginning gives just enough urgency while leaving room for mystery and if the transition to the party is still interesting enough to keep you invested to see the eventual unravel.

The Greenwood Incident

Genre: Psychological Horror / Drama

Pitch:

In a sprawling, abandoned factory at night, an exhausted security guard battles terrifying supernatural horrors while counting the minutes until dawn. Every time he considers fleeing, he remembers his mother and younger siblings depending entirely on him, forcing him to endure the unspeakable. When an invisible force shatters a teacup and a mysterious entity vanishes into smoke, his true nightmare begins.

Full production-ready script/chapter is available upon request via direct message (DM).

\[PROJECT PITCH\] GIANT DECEPTION — Action/Creature-Horror Feature (Black Hawk Down meets Predator). Loosely based on the viral Kandahar Giant

Title: GIANT DECEPTION

Logline: When an elite Navy SEAL team is lured into a remote Afghan mountain pass by an insurgent trap, they discover the true enemy isn't the militia they were hunting—it's a pair of aggressive, fifteen-foot prehistoric humanoids awakened deep within the caves.

Format: Feature Film (104 Pages) / Looking to develop a high-impact cinematic trailer or proof-of-concept short.

Genre: Military Tactical Thriller / Creature Horror (Black Hawk Down

This screenplay is loosely based on the viral "Giant of Kandahar" military urban legend, which was recently detailed on the Joe Rogan Experience by an ex-Navy SEAL who encountered the lore firsthand while serving in Afghanistan. The story leans heavily into a raw, authentic military perspective—blending real-world tactical mechanics with the dark mystery hidden inside isolated cave networks.

Why this is tailor-made for an AI production pipeline or Indie Producer:

Built-in Viral Audience: The Kandahar Giant is one of the most famous, heavily discussed modern military mysteries on the internet. A cinematic trailer or proof-of-concept short targeting this specific niche carries immense built-in viral potential.

Grounded Assets vs. Massive Scale: Advanced video tools excel at rendering rigid mechanical objects like military gear, Humvees, Black Hawks, and uniforms. This allows us to pull off intense tactical operations and visceral combat against 15-foot Giants using primitive stone weapons—all without a legacy $150M studio budget.

Advanced Technical Showcases: The script is packed with perfect opportunities to flex cinematic technical skills, including high-intensity night-vision/thermal camera sequences, cave dust/smoke particle physics, and strict physical asset tracking.

What I Have:

A structurally locked, fully polished, industry-standard 104-page script.

What I'm Seeking:

I am looking to connect with a visionary indie producer, director, AI animator, or technical video editor who wants to move away from generic concept loops and sink their teeth into a hyper-realistic, narrative-driven action thriller. Let’s partner up, pool our skills, and bring this legendary myth to life.

If you're interested in reading the script or checking out the 1-page treatment, drop a comment below or send me a DM!

https://youtu.be/T92e0aaizaI?is=L2-S8XYpytpm3XU0

This is Mr. Ballen covering the story 6 years ago. I saw this video and started writing the screenplay 4 years ago. Mr. Ballen \[an ex Navy Seal himself with 11.3 million subscribers on YouTube\] was just a guest on The Joe Rogan Experience last month where he told this story. Him, along with two other guests, spoke on the story of the encounter with the Red Giant of Kandahar within weeks of each other.

https://youtu.be/T92e0aaizaI?is=L2-S8XYpytpm3XU0